literature

Sweet Kid

Deviation Actions

Celvas's avatar
By
Published:
1.2K Views

Literature Text

Bresh's allergic to strawberries.


The last time he ate some he spent two hours squeezing vomit through his swollen gullet, nearly drowning in spit, half-digested food and gastric acid before his father opted to throw him into the car and drive him to the ER. It was a suicide attempt. He knew he would go to hell for this. But Bresh had somehow banked on God not noticing that it wasn't accidental.


Death by strawberry.


He thought that was funny.



Bresh, oh beloved sociopath.
© 2013 - 2024 Celvas
Comments28
Join the community to add your comment. Already a deviant? Log In
artbypaulfisher's avatar
I've read a fair bit of the literature you've submitted, but this one I've read I think five, maybe six times now. I'm no literature critic and don't know half as much about creative writing as you do, but I'm clearly in complete denial about being drawn to this little story, so I guess it's about time I commented on it. 

Firstly, I find it a little mind boggling how you've managed to get so much character and charm into so few words. 'Charm' seems an odd word to use when describing what is essentially a dark subject, but this little story is oddly charming. After only four/five words, I'm already sympathetic.

One of the big points of this that's kept my interest, which I'm sure is intentional by the way, is how you've described Bresh's tempting the fate about going to hell. You've written this part extremely interestingly, especially for someone who reads into things too much, like I do. He 'somehow banked on God not noticing that it wasn't accidental'? This totally screws my brain over with double negatives. If he was banking on God NOT noticing that it WASN'T accidental, he was actually banking on God noticing that it was intentional, and thus sending him to hell? Even in so few lines, I believe your sociopathic (existing word? I'm not sure) character could be meaning it in both ways at once - enjoying the rush of getting away with it, but also wanting it.

The fact that I'm intrigued and entertained enough by your character to be able to think up other things that could happen to him myself tells me that the length of the story is perfect. I love it. It's a great little tale, told honestly with a mildly sick humour. You really should upload more of this sort of thing, I'd read them all for sure.